cleeve wrote a song.
 

http://myspace.com/jasonstieber


Let me know what you think. Wrote it, did the guitar and vocals, and had a friend of mine do the drum beat i made.


Feedback is much appreciated [thumbup]!

That was nice aye, intro a little long and I think a pause in vocals after u say 'damn' would make it a little better, but I know nothing about music :P

I liked it, it sounded easy on the ears, and the vocals weren't to overpowering.
Just curious what about the song you didn't like?

I love it. one thing I would try is singing louder at some points. Generally- start quietly(as you did through the whole song) then(in the middle\main part of the song) louder and as you get closer to the ending lower your voice again.
something else that bothered me a little, not a big deal though- the ending was too sudden.
Don't get me wrong, I loved it, really, good job, it doesn't sound like a bunch of amateurs and that's rare.[thumbup]

Wow, good job. Defiantly a good song to just sit and think. I agree it ended just a little sudden, but over all, pretty good. Keep up the good work.

Thanks for the feedback so far everyone [thumbup].


@ s0up: I think that I could've varied the guitar riff a bit more maybe. Otherwise, I don't know! That's why I'm asking you guys http://www.discussworldissues.com/fo...ies/laugh1.gif.


As for it ending too abruptly, that was the intention but I do understand what you guys are saying.

I was hoping for some feedback from my Console Gaming brothers so they could see my other side http://www.discussworldissues.com/fo...es/unsure1.gif http://www.discussworldissues.com/fo...es/tongue1.gif !

Very nice song....I love it [thumbup]

I don't think the intro was too long........Loved it from start to finish [thumbup]

Here's how it went:

Daughter - What are you listening to?
Me - Some guy from a message board I go to.
Daughter - Sounds good.
Me - Yep.